I tried to evaluate the stories based on what I thought their intentions were--

*Firefly - I assumed this was a fanfic of some sort (because of its references to outside things), and evaluated it on that premise. The writing was pretty good, and it read smoothly. If it is in fact a fanfic for something, I felt like my understanding kind of suffered from being unfamiliar with the source material (e.g. the monkey/firefly story). If it wasn't a fanfic, it might benefit from sharing a little more info with the audience (not character backgrounds, etc. - since I think it works better if the audience doesn't know too much - but more like the monkey/firefly story, what the whole betrayal/saving incident was about, etc.)

Friendship - The writing could have been better, but I was probably drawn into this story the most. Short, simple, it didn't try to do much, so it was able to tell a complete story without leaving the reader feeling like they're missing out on something big. I almost voted for this one.

*Thousand Dicks - I didn't have any expectations when I read this, and I found it to be kind of interesting actually. Albeit kind of crude, it was kind of refreshing to read a story that didn't try to force suspense & intriguing dialogue, manipulate the audience with emotion, etc.

The Game - I think people mentioned the transitions, etc. already. The story felt really fragmented, and I wasn't able to get a clear sense of what its intentions were. It's saving grace would probably be its awareness of world events, but even on that note, on some levels it seemed like a cautionary tale, and on others, it was kind of indulgent. So I guess it felt like it was going in all sorts of directions in multiple different levels.