Manga in the works *updated*

[Santah]

*updated version of kamii, see further down the page*

OK well I've got a manga in the works and I just thought I would post a little concept art here to get some feedback.

This is a project shared between 2 peeps.

This guy coming up is known as "Kamii". I cant give away any story but lets just say he is he is the "im too cool for school" bad guy.

Here is the original drawing done by Sean.
http://www.files.blazingaces.com/misc/manga/Kamiioriginal.jpg

It was obvious we needed to tone down the hair a bit, so I sent him back to the drawing board. Kamii also looks too similar to dbz for my tastes, but none of the other charecters he has done so far look the same.

Over the weekend I thought I would practise scanning and colouring in the line art.

Here is the image scanned and cleaned up slightlly by me *note I didnt put too much effort into this as I knew I would have a new picture on Monday to replace this one*
http://www.files.blazingaces.com/misc/manga/Kamii.jpg

Finally following a tutorial I did my first colouring effort on lineart.
http://www.files.blazingaces.com/misc/manga/Kamiicolour.jpg

It kind of looks like he has a plant on his head http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/tongue.gif Next version I might make him blonde.

So yeah that was my first effort, thoughts? As I said, on Monday I will have a new version of Kamii which will have simplified hair and less of a dbz look. If anyone is interested I will upload images Monday night/tuesday.

[Jman]

Concept art looks good. Wish you luck with your project.

[joker-kun]

yeah its cool.

[r3n]

looks good, good luck!

[Santah]

Thanks.

Tomorrow I will be uploading a new version of Kamii, and he will most likelly have blonde hair.

Also here is a very rough sketch of the nerdy protagonist guy.

http://www.files.blazingaces.com/misc/manga/akushu.jpg

[Santah]

new kamii!

(note, this was scanned from a photocopy so it doesnt look so clean)

http://www.files.blazingaces.com/misc/manga/kamiinew.jpg

Colour version will be done in a hour.

[Hakeem_21]

I must say the new Kamii looks soo cool.

Will you put your manga in here so we can read when you are finished?

[Santah]

Yeah the manga will be available for all to download on the internet.

[Santah]

also here is a updated pic of Akushu (still rough)


http://www.files.blazingaces.com/misc/manga/akushuedit.jpg

[Santah]

Heres a colour version in progress. Biggest thing im still working on is lighting on face.
http://www.files.blazingaces.com/misc/manga/kamiinewcolour.jpg

[L8r]

doesnt it look a little like turk from DBZ? or mabye its just my eys playing tricks with me... damn im tired im of to bed..cya in tha morning
(i think his name was turk...the guy from the future)

[Jman]

nice 1 Santah. The colored, simplified hair looks cool.

[Anbu Girl]

dude this is great.. http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/laugh.gif like the linart .. good job http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/wink.gif I love creating an Original Characters .. http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif

Good Luck!

[narushika]

</div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'>doesnt it look a little like turk from DBZ? or mabye its just my eys playing tricks with me... damn im tired im of to bed..cya in tha morning
(i think his name was turk...the guy from the future)</td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'>

whos TURK?? http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/laugh.gif ...i only know a guy name trunks from dbz...u know vegeta&#39;s son http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/mf_laughbounce2.gif

[PSJ]

turks are the ones living in turkey... the country next to iraq but nice pics, i would do a bunch of original characters if i had any talent http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/tongue.gif actually thought of some naruto characters..

nice work tho i would love to read your manga when its finished btw are you inspired by dbz?

[Hatake Kakashi]

All of those character designs are pretty solid.

Show us the token old pervert http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/wink.gif

[Death BOO Z]

i think the forehead of Kamii is way too large and the hair&#39;s right (the paper&#39;s right side, our left side) bananna is too big, but other than that, it looks pretty good.

[AnbuPawn]

</div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (ricefarmer &#064; Feb 14 2004, 04:57 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> actually i can do a shit load better, im a graphics designer idiot </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'>
Sorry, but being supposively a &quot;graphic designer&quot; is irrelevant when comparing drawing skills. If you don&#39;t like it, keep to yourself, he&#39;s not hurting anyone.

Santah, keep up the good work, the only way to get better is to draw more http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/happy.gif The anatomy is a little off for Rikaa, however. The elbow should be about even with the waist.

[PSJ]

</div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (ricefarmer @ Feb 14 2004, 10:57 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> actually i can do a shit load better, im a graphics designer idiot </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'>
hmm i think you should shut up.... dont post if you dont like it.. or give critisism in a good and nice way.

[Santah]

Here is &quot;Rikaa&quot;. He is Akushu&#39;s best friend.

http://www.files.blazingaces.com/misc/manga/rikaa.jpg

I have finished writing out all the major charecters that will feature in the manga, there are 9 in total (5 male, 3 female, 1 that is neither http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/tongue.gif)

The first chapter has also been written with all the dialogue planned, I will be drawing out a roughh version of it over the weekend to decide on the lay out of the panels etc.

[Hakeem_21]

</div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Santah @ Feb 9 2004, 07:05 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> Heres a colour version in progress. Biggest thing im still working on is lighting on face.
http://www.files.blazingaces.com/misc/manga/kamiinewcolour.jpg </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'>
This blond kamii looks a lot better than the green one http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/wink.gif

Dont you dare to change his eyes, they make him look badass http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif

[ricefarmer]

this stuff really sucks.. sorry to say u have no talent so stop ur plans while u can with the so called &quot;manga&quot; pshh..

[RockLeeisHOT]

</div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (ricefarmer @ Feb 14 2004, 03:47 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> this stuff really sucks.. sorry to say u have no talent so stop ur plans while u can with the so called &quot;manga&quot; pshh.. </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'>
you need to get off your soap box. if you don&#39;t like something, then instead of making rude comments like this, shut the fuck up&#33; Can you do better?

[lasaire]

Can we not turn this into a flame war?

Santah, I like your design for Kimi, he does look better with blonde hair. I can tell that you&#39;ve been influenced by Akira Toriyama and DBZ.

Doing a whole manga is alot of work&#33; I wish you good luck and perserverance. I know I&#39;d never make it through the whole way&#33;

[ricefarmer]

actually i can do a shit load better, im a graphics designer idiot

[Santah]

well seings as this is my first effort at digitally colouring anything ever, I wouldn&#39;t expect it to be very good.

Thanks for the constructive criticism http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/rolleyes.gif

This is a learning expierence, the only way to get better is to practise, so why give up?

Anyway, when reading a manga I usually find the dialogue + story takes the primary focus.

[Santah]

</div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (AnbuPawn @ Feb 14 2004, 01:04 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> </div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (ricefarmer &#064; Feb 14 2004, 04:57 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> actually i can do a shit load better, im a graphics designer idiot </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'>
Sorry, but being supposively a &quot;graphic designer&quot; is irrelevant when comparing drawing skills. If you don&#39;t like it, keep to yourself, he&#39;s not hurting anyone.

Santah, keep up the good work, the only way to get better is to draw more http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/happy.gif The anatomy is a little off for Rikaa, however. The elbow should be about even with the waist. </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'>
Yeah I noticed that after I inked it, oops http://www.gotwoot.net/forum/html/emoticons/blink.gif

As for Kamii, I have had numerous arguements with the other drawer that his hairline is way too high, to me it looks like it starts right at the top of his skull, thats why his forehead is so large&#33; It will all get ironed out by the first chapter though, so its all good.